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Truly wide-eyed (and stupefied) after sparks died...
Why? This desolate funeral… nobody cried.
Do explosive emotions hide, entombed inside?
Oversupplied assumptions were drowned by the tide…
Sorrowful expressions and anguish should collide!
Drab despair, exposed, implied. Idiots confide:
No actor tried hollow sympathies to deride.
DAMNIT! At. Least. Weep!
After this suicide...
Melancholic measurement missing, never spied,
When expectations subside, when cruel classmates chide-
Behind uncounted backs… crowded insults reside.
These actions unbelievable, regrets decide:
let the knife slide. Quickly leave a world, toaster-fried,
For shocking attention, but here is the divide,
Between reality and the dreams of what would happen
after my suicide...
I was justly denied.
Why? This desolate funeral… nobody cried.
Do explosive emotions hide, entombed inside?
Oversupplied assumptions were drowned by the tide…
Sorrowful expressions and anguish should collide!
Drab despair, exposed, implied. Idiots confide:
No actor tried hollow sympathies to deride.
DAMNIT! At. Least. Weep!
After this suicide...
Melancholic measurement missing, never spied,
When expectations subside, when cruel classmates chide-
Behind uncounted backs… crowded insults reside.
These actions unbelievable, regrets decide:
let the knife slide. Quickly leave a world, toaster-fried,
For shocking attention, but here is the divide,
Between reality and the dreams of what would happen
after my suicide...
I was justly denied.
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I recently rewrote this poem to fit closer to my standards and personality. I changed to to be a little more clean. I thought it was messier before and I wanted to alter the way it was from the first... I wanted the "first person" nature of it to be a shock at the end rather than thematic through the entire experience.
Updated:
09/16/2013
Original Text
I was wide eyed and stupefied after I died...
Why? Because at my funeral- Nobody Cried.
Maybe true feelings hide, deep down inside-
Let the pit of despair and well of tears collide!
But sadness wasn't implied- I just want to confide
That they could of tried- to let their emotions ride,
And flow with the tide. DAMNIT! At least weep! At. Least. Weep!
after my suicide...
The application of this theory I shouldn't have applied,
What can I expect, when all my friends chide-
Behind my back, this is what I deserve.
An act I couldn't believe, regrets that I would decide:
To let the knife slide, To leave the world, Toaster-Fried,
I did it for attention, now I see the divide,
Between reality and the dreams of what would happen to me
after my suicide... I was denied.
by as my cover image. Please check out her art and support her.
----
I recently rewrote this poem to fit closer to my standards and personality. I changed to to be a little more clean. I thought it was messier before and I wanted to alter the way it was from the first... I wanted the "first person" nature of it to be a shock at the end rather than thematic through the entire experience.
Updated:
09/16/2013
Original Text
I was wide eyed and stupefied after I died...
Why? Because at my funeral- Nobody Cried.
Maybe true feelings hide, deep down inside-
Let the pit of despair and well of tears collide!
But sadness wasn't implied- I just want to confide
That they could of tried- to let their emotions ride,
And flow with the tide. DAMNIT! At least weep! At. Least. Weep!
after my suicide...
The application of this theory I shouldn't have applied,
What can I expect, when all my friends chide-
Behind my back, this is what I deserve.
An act I couldn't believe, regrets that I would decide:
To let the knife slide, To leave the world, Toaster-Fried,
I did it for attention, now I see the divide,
Between reality and the dreams of what would happen to me
after my suicide... I was denied.
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wow, that is really gripping, awesome rhyme scheme and choice of words