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This is a stop motion about being playful. Imagine, if you will, your friend hanging out in a theatre and she feel asleep while you were off using the restroom or something. You try to sneak up on her, but she wakes up and sees you.

These were all done with my dSLR, Canon Rebel XS I shrunk the images to 300x200 and then used flash to have them play at 10 frames per second to generate this video.

Special Note: This is my FIRST ever video. Still trying to work out the process. My second video is a little longer and a little more graphically pleasing: akuard.deviantart.com/art/The-…
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MojoTurtle Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010
I think this was a great effort for a first attempt ! I've never made a slow motion video before, so this may not be the best critique you'll receive aha .

I liked it, the lighting was good, it made it feel quite friendly and fun.

The only thing I didn't like was when she ducked behind the chairs and it continued after going completely black. I'd either avoid going so dark, or end it there.

But other than that, great effort :D
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Finally got you back. Sorry it took a year lol.
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MojoTurtle Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2012
Haha no worries! Sorry that took 6 months to reply to haha. We are clearly way too busy xD
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JamesGravell Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010   General Artist
I agree with what was said about stopping the video when she drops behind he chair. I think that would be a better ending, and would help the video flow better.
Other than that, quite original work, I like it. Keep it up. :)
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
I tend to think that that wouldn't be a very good ending. Remember they're playing a game similar to hide and seek. What would be the point of finding this girl sleeping if she just disappeared. I think, in retrospect, I should have looked for her for a few more frames - like looking left and right before whirling on her sitting calmly behind me
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HappyRock Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Student Photographer
Nice work. :) I think the video should have ended when she dropped behind the chairs. The last few seconds didn't really flow with the rest of it.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
How then would we get the full effect of hide and seek? :)
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HappyRock Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Student Photographer
Ahh, I see :)
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NurBoyXVI Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Professional General Artist
when you gave a smile, you have to smile for real; it's like your faking it. lul

That's my retarded critique. :XD:
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
It is fine... except my model isn't me... and her smile was genuine.
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Exclamationpointman Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Neat little piece isn't it? Well, I think it's a good sort of situation for a first jab at the art. The location/lighting may seem a bit unrealistic or whatever, but that really doesn't bother me even slightly, I think you made that lonely under-light work charms on your actor. That really adds to the "charm" as well honestly; to have it be set in such a dark room with only a her glowing upper-body to bring about a childish sort of effect. It worked, I'd say!

I think the effect you went for wasn't too bad. The stop-motion thing works out cause it highlights the minute changes in emotion per slide on her face and in her position. Though, I did find the whole thing to feel a bit more romantic than a...friend. That's really the only problem I'd find but I don't think that'd be a crucial thing.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Gotcha with the hitback!
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AyumiNazu Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Professional General Artist
This is a very smooth stop motion! Very well done for your first time!
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Hey thanks ayumi!
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AyumiNazu Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Professional General Artist
welcome
*awaiting critique*
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Did you put a thumb in the thumbshare thread for me to look at? You're aware that I watch you right?
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AyumiNazu Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Professional General Artist
Yup it was this one: [link]
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
I was actually indicating that if you looked at the thread you're last in line with two more people infront of you. Your comment doesn't really warrent a critique like this persons, [link] simply because you weren't helpful. You just said "hey' this is good." You're kind of missing the point. I know its good. I made it. I wouldn't upload it if it was bad. I was looking for the problems, the bad things, things I could fix. Other peoples comments led me to generate my next video which fixed many of the errors they mentioned. I am looking for IMPROVEMENT not some superficial pat on the back.
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AyumiNazu Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Professional General Artist
Ahh~ Ya, but I've never done any stop motion/animation/videos before, so I really had no idea what to say about it or what you can improve on o_o" I personally think that your stop motion was fine :)
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Neither have I.
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Black-Spirit-1991 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Ahh this is great :) It has a very playful air about it and as others have said, I really like the lighting. I don't have any problem with the choppy motion; to me, it adds to the 'fun' of the video. Great work for a first video!
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks :)
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Black-Spirit-1991 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome :)
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MishraFathom Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
its interesting though things it starts off to dark. but the dramatic lighting when you are closer to the pretty ladies face is really awesome very warm lighting. good contrast. its a pretty cute video the playfulness comes across nicely but waiting for it to buffer on DA is painful lol should put up a version of it on you tube too , also that way you can double up the frames and play it at like 24 frames per second so ya make two of every frame and play it at 24 frames for second. might work out nice its what i have done for stop mo in the past. also what program did you use to comp the images together ?

anyway good luck :D btw that is a beautiful girl in that vid.....o.o;):P
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Why would I double every frame and then do 24 frames per second? I am at 10fps. I used flash. She is quite attractive, yes. If I would have taken more frames initially I would have uploaded it at 30 fps. But what I use to initially test my video is my camera, which can only display the videos about 10 fps as I am shooting.
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MishraFathom Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
no its will play like film but be snappier... its kinda what bugs bunny and stuff like that do they take like 12 frames per second and then double it but so they make up a full few seconds with half as many drawing then double up the frames and play it at 24 frames to make it smoother. just something to try and play around with :P

just a thought :P look it up its a pretty interesting thing to keep in my and apply with animation from stop mo to hand drawn. sames time and dosnt look to bad if done nicely :)
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LS-Napier Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
Let me preface this comment by saying I know nothing about stop motion. :XD:

I really love the lighting in the clip; however I feel the combination of the lighting and the empty theater makes the clip seem a bit spooky.

I can definitely see the playfulness aspect in the vid, but I think perhaps a bigger reaction when the girl is first awoken would have helped the vid. As is, it's a little hard to understand what happened, and it seems more like the girl just attacked the person video-taping, lol. Of course, after you read the description it makes perfect sense, but I would think one would want the vid to be self explanatory.

Overall, good job! Like I said I love the lighting, and you (or whoever played the girl) did a wonderful job with the expressions. :clap:
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
The idea is that I don't know anything about stop motion either.
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LS-Napier Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010
Lol, well the at least the only way to go is up then. :)
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Shondrea Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok, I'll say first of I dunno anything about videomaking or editing, so I'm going to go by looks alone

I love the warm tone of the film. I don't know if this was the sort of thing you were going for, but I get this feeling that it's almost a horror movie snippet. All alone, dark, one bright spot. Kinda feels like if you'd have gone a few frames more somethig would have come after you with a chainsaw. How she just pops up out of nowhere in the next row certainly helps with this.

I think maybe a few seconds in the lead up were a little too fast and jerky, just before you get to her. Just feels a bit jarred maybe?
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Neither do I. This is my first video, remember? I wanted it to feel like a mixture between a horror film and a playful film. Like the and setting sneaking was dangerous but the actions were not. Almost a tongue and cheek approach. The playful nature is what balances it out - drives the irony.

The jerkyness could be from your system buffering the image... or maybe we find differnt amounts of framerates unsettling. We're (as consumers) used to 30 or 60 fps but this image is only 10.
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Shondrea Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I went back and watched this on a different compute, and I think you're right; I think my computer was just snagging! It went smoother from here
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Slainmonkey Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
Not bad there is a nice use of colour and lighting, you capture the intend playful spirit....I will however say that the only real issue is the choppy motion. While if it's done for stylistic effect it needs some refinement. Overall a good effort.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
The choppiness does come from the stop motion. I addressed a little of that in my next video and explained why latency might have been an issue the last time you saw it when I responded to you in the thread. Thanks.
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Slainmonkey Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
no problem
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TinoDeak Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
The lightning is interesting, and the quality is really good.

Im no expert in stop motion im really missing the "playfull" factor(might be just be). The shots where she is crawling up on those chairs seems to be a little too fast and too short.

However overal its a good concept, if you work on this type of art i bet you will master it very quickly :)
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
I wanted it to be fast, but maybe you're right. I took that comment into heavy consideration in my second video that I linked you too.
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Himmatmatour Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you look hot in in...its good though....the flash video has certain quality.....i liked it
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks :)
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Yoni-Danziger Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Professional General Artist
Most intriguing mate :nod:
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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WorldofPaper Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I actually really like the lighting, here. It's probably one of my favorite things about this little clip.

Unfortunately, I don't know much about stop motion, so I can't really critique you on your techniques. Going by what little I do know, from watching other stop motion photo videos, I can't really see much wrong with it. If I had to complain about anything, it would just be that some of the pose transitions of the girl were a little jerkier than others, making it look a bit inconsistent.

I have to admit though, I'm a little confused about why she slips under the seats and moves up to the front row. The effect is kind of neat, but I'm not entirely sure how that would be a reasonable reaction to someone sneaking up on her.

All and all, it's a cool little thing, and I like it.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
She is playing. Like she slips down and quickly crawls away so I am surprised that she isn't there and look around to find her. =D
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WorldofPaper Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, okay. I guess I was just a little confused because of her expression and reaction to you finding her again. It looks kind of like she was just trying to escape you, rather than trying to mess with you further, since she covers up the camera like that. Though I suppose that bit was more done for the transition, than anything. So it makes sense.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Yeah, like a mom closing a little kids eyes? Its ok that I didn't get everything across in my first ever video! lol
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WorldofPaper Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course. XD It really is quite good. I was just trying to pinpoint what I felt was a bit off about it. It's extremely good for a first attempt.
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Did you see the second? Sorry, I am not sure who i've asked at this point.
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WorldofPaper Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
The second?
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
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M-Bae Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010
Hahaha for your first EVER video this is quite good and was enjoyable to watch :) Though downside if anything would have to be that it was taken in such a dark atmosphere that the light, when increased. made it seem a bit spooky if I didn't read your artists comment before hand. But I guess that couldn't be helped >< Hope that helps but mm! Keep it up :) Great camera you have there!!!
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